...his eyes are heavy with adrenaline, stung with fear and catching the luminous crowns of the ceiling lights in them , like tiny pin-dot halos framing his quivering pupils. His tongue flicks out and brushes his dry bottom lip as he brings his stubby fingered hand up to his chin, loaded with the stubble of lost days, and drags it down framing his mouth in the slow descending V of the crook of his thumb. An eyebrow twitches and he takes the hand from his chin to smooth back a long frond of hair that has crept down from his balding scalp, now held in place by the scattered beads of sweat that had erupted on his forehead under the lights and squeezed out by the pressure of the hostile, drunken eyes that now stared at him up on his stage, the air alive with the wurlitzer reproduction big-band intro. of the song. Shuffling into the line of the screen he gazes far off behind the heads of the drinkers into some unknown horizon, his face illuminated blue on one side by the sickly light of the screen, the other a depth of shadows his eye pricked out among them by that same halo of light as he slowly growls the first line of the song 'I, I who have nothing. I, I who have no-one..'


5 Comments:
Shd it not be; " Tongue brushing the upper lip". I know it can be either ways. But then try it urself and tell me if it felt weird.
Anyways! Nice to have u back!
i see your point vipin but it was meant to illustrate more licking of a lip after it had been nervously chewed. good point though.
i know you have poetry on one blog but have you ever considered doing prose of any sort?
Licking sounds good..;-)
Anyways, I do write prose. Infact my latest blog entry is actually an off the beat prose. I usually believe in writing for my own satisfaction and pleasure. I think too much. I mean its just non-stop. When this thinking gets too much to handle for my inner voice; I write it down.
I used to write in my Diary and believe that its somebody else writing and giving me reassuarance. Now to actually "believe" that, I blog.
All this helps me strike a balance between me and the world outside. Otherwise if I dont think or write I feel suffocated with the callousness shown by most of the human species towards each other.
Well..!!
Ara. There is a lot od description and illumination in he first 2 lines..I have never seen eyes quiver...flicker like maybe...of course its good. be back
molliemalone
hi there. yes vipin, writing can be very cathartic and it is always easier to write things down on a page than to verbalise them. i feel that when writing prose you can really get inside the mind of the characters you create and through them you can view the world from almost another viewpoint.
thanks mollie, always nice to have an opinion voiced, i too shall check in on your blogs, i like decriptive writing i feel illustration through words can often be more potent than a photograph or drwing as it conveys the emotive side of things too. keep up the blogging!
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