...I can hear the sound of cats fighting somewhere down below, high pitched squeals interrupted with the occasional sharp hiss, and the low throaty growl that signifies one's poised to attack. A lull, then the untidy clattering sound of a dustbin lid being dislodged and falling on the concrete. That hollow, round noise as it spins on its lip till finally settling with a defiant clank. The cats scatter at this, their smooth, lithe bodies flickering across the ground like wisps of black smoke, melting into the shadows till all that remains are the orange ovals of their eyes staring out from the gloom.


3 Comments:
amazing detail yet again! lovely piece...
but then dont u think one thing stands out. The use of the word "dustbin" seems so out of place...
just a suggestion... hope u dont mind!
i see your point, i wanted to create the image of one of those heavy, metal lids and I've always associated them with dustbins...not a pretty word i know!
criticism is always appreciated!
i read your poetry blog...thoughtful stuff.
Thanks for the get well wishes! I'm slowly coming around to feeling more like myself but it's been rough. Isn't it amazing how much snot the human body can produce over a particular period of time? j/k
Anyway, I agree with the previous poster, your descriptions seem to be coming alive with passion and depth!
Back to work for me. Will stay in touch.
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